Infinity is just mere finite the mind cannot conquer.
They wanted to surpass death, so they took the pen
and called themselves writers and wrote
everything their mind wanted conveyed, also,
what their fingers could endure (the hands respond slowly to impulse).
Little did they know, they died a thousand deaths,
noble and abominable, nevertheless, slow and cruel.
The tragedy of commons
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this is nice.
Hi Kuya Monching.
gusto ko yung huling saknong, ngunit may nararamdaman akong suliranin tungkol sa lohika ng mga naunang saknong:
1. "Infinity is just mere finite the mind cannot conquer." medyo malabo, ngunit kuha ko naman ang ninanais mong sabihin.
2. redundant ang pagsasasama ng 'writers' at 'pen' sa isang saknong. at least for me.
3. astig yung 'what their fingers could endure' yet 'everything their mind wanted conveyed' deals more with metaphysics, at pakiramdam ko kailangan mo ng experience sa nitong bahagi.
4. subtle ang pinapahiwatig ng 'Little did they know, they died a thousand deaths,' kasi nakikita ko ang tunggalian ng finitude at infinity, ngunit baka hindi makita ng ibang tao.
Ending,
edit lang yan hehe. you need to experience more. may sinasabi ka e. kailangan lang ayusin ang pagkakasabi. try reading philosophy, or kahit yung mga maikling poetry books.
Bumabad ka sa mga akda.
Gudlak Geneve! :D:D:D:D